T1+Writing

__**Persuasive Writing - People should visit the Bay Of Plenty!!**__

Times are tough and money is tight!! People don't have a lot of spare money to go travelling with. This is having a very negative effect on the tourism in the Bay of Plenty. You need to write a persuasive argument convincing people to visit the Bay of Plenty. Think about everything they can do here and give them reasons to choose BOP over other places in NZ or even the world.

WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.

Success Criteria My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

I believe that the bay of plenty is perfect for a holiday. it’s cheap it’s fun and you can go on a walk up a hill named the mount;. the mount is free it can give you pleanty of exercise and you will love it so why not go?.

In the bay you can see lots of new things like if you go to rainbow springs wildlife park there are so many animals you have never seen be for,that may be there like the kiwi and the lions some times you can pat a real life cub. if you want to go it’s only at the price of $30 for the each person. If you want to have lots of fun you can go to agra dome. There is lots to do there like the swop, bungie jumping and there is some thing called the sky dive you will not deny that you had fun.

This is definitely not finished Kurtis and it should be! You had plenty of class time to complete this piece of writing. From what you have written I can see that you understand the use of personal pronouns which is good and you have attempted to use paragraphs, well done. You need to use stronger imperatives to really convince me to come visit. I would have expected more from this Kurtis, not your best effort. Miss Crone